Be smart online learners英语作文范文及分析指导
指导：
先说第一个要点：分析优势与不足。
这个要点是包含两个层面的，即：优势，不足。因此我们要分为两个段落比较好。
科技话题话题思维关键词：accessible, convenient, efficiency, privacy, time-saving, low-cost (expense), distraction, flexible
也就是说这些词各自代表一个思维发散点，它们都可以拓展为一个句子的，但具体的句子怎么写是要看考生的写作实际水平的。
第一段：
Online learning is an important way to study recently. But how to become smart learners should become our high priority.
分析：
所给句说明了online learning，但文章标题关键词是smart learners，因此第二句最好是点题，作为文章主题段。
第二句要点是：成为smart learners很有必要。
这个有多种写法： be necessary; be urgent to; what matters / counts is to…
我选的是priority，原因是议论文经常用 first / top / main priority表示：优先处理的事，当务之急。类似的还有：high on the agenda; top our list等。
第二段：
Undoubtedly, online learning can become mainstreamed for its obvious advantagessuch as easily accessible resources, the low cost and great convenience, which contribute tohigh study efficiency. Besides, current pandemic necessitates online learning when necessary.
分析：
写议论文的第二段，首先留意如何连贯和衔接，我这里用Undoubtedly副词来达到语气上的衔接。
接下来写主题句和支撑句了，考虑到100词的限制，我把它们放在一个句子里写， 通常写法是：主题句+介词(with, by, such as, like)+支撑细节。当然如果空间控制的好，完全可以分开写，用到first…; for one thing, for another了。
造句：写网上学习的好处和流行有很多表达： enjoy popularity = gain in popularity; be welcomed; become an inseparable part of…; play a big role in…
我这里用：mainstream的动词用法，其实本来我还想用popularize，构成：sth popularize …，但考虑sth主语太长了，就没用。
至于思维点就是我一开始提到的，这里也可以换成句子，譬如：英语话题作文
We can have easy access to abundant learning resources.
Online learning offers us great convenience, thus saving us much time and cost and bringing us study efficiency.
这样的句子同样都是很棒的。
接下来的句子我用到了necessitate，这也是写“必要性“常用的一个词，表示“使……成为必要”。
第三段：
However, long screen timecan do much harm toour eyesight, not to mentionmany online distractions especially for those lacking self-control.
分析：
网上学习的弊端，可以从physical和mental来考虑。议论文讨论利弊基本都是二分法。要说明的是，我本来写：However, the negative sides can’t be ignored, either。考虑字数我改了。
第一句也有多种写法，譬如：
Exposure to the screen too long can do harm…
但是现在screen time更简洁，我采用了这个。
怎么谈弊端，有：
1. do harm to对……有害
2. deprive sb of …剥夺了
3. cost sb sth使某人失去
4. pose a threat to对……构成威胁
第四段：
Therefore, we are expected tobe smart online learners by sensibly managing our time online and doing eye-exercises regularly. Most importantly, it takes self-discipline to resist all the distraction online towards a smart online learner.
分析：
这个句子写法实际上和第二段第一句是一个道理的，只不过一个用such as…，一个用by doing…。议论文造句说起来复杂，其实最关键是简单句的使用，简单句写好关键是：介词和动词。这个你在未来更多的写作中会体会到的。
第二个句子用到了：it takes…to do…
完整的：
Be smart online learners
Online learning is an important way to study recently. But how to become smart learners should become our high priority.
Undoubtedly, online learningcan become mainstreamed for itsobvious advantages such as easily accessible resources, the low cost and great convenience, which contribute to high study efficiency. Besides, current pandemic necessitates online learningwhen necessary.
However, long screen time can do much harm to our eyesight, not to mention many online distractions especially for those lacking self-control.
Therefore, we are expected to be smart online learnersby sensibly managing our time online and doing eye-exercises regularly. Most importantly, it takes self-discipline to resist all the distraction online towards a smart online learner. (102 words)
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