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高考记叙文写作 写人篇 考查要点 高考书面表达的记叙文同一般的记叙文有所不同，需要记叙的时间、地点、人物、内容及经过都有要求和限制，学生必须根据所给的要求和提示叙述。高考书面表达的记叙文的内容和要点可以通过图画、表格或汉字等给予揭示，有时还和书信、日记等体裁相结合。 记叙文的分类 （1）以记人为主的记叙文。即以人物为中心组织材料，围绕这个人物来写一两件事。 （2）以叙事为主的记叙文。即以时间为中心组织材料，围绕中心事件，可以写一个人或几个人。 （3）以写景状物为主的记叙文。但应注意的是，在一篇记叙文中，写人、写事、写景往往是交织在一起的，不可截然分开，但应各有侧重。 写作要点 （1）六要素：一般记叙文都具有时间、地点、人物、事件、原因和结果等要素。 （2）结构：不论是记人还是记事，文章中应有一条（或几条）贯穿全文的线，要有开始、中间、结尾。 （3）叙事角度：写作时，通常用第一人称和第三人称两种角度来记叙。使用第一人称，即以当事人的口吻来叙述事件或人物，使人感到亲切、可信，缺点是有可能主观或武断。使用第三人称，使人感觉更加客观，有身临其境之感，这种叙述角度常用于对重大事件的客观报道，以及叙述他人的经历或事迹。 （4）顺序：一般来说，记叙文是按时间顺序来叙述的，最常用的叙述方法是顺序和倒叙。顺序就是按照客观事物发生、发展的先后次序进行叙述，容易把事件说清楚。倒叙，及先倒叙结果，然后按事件的发展顺序进行叙述。 （5）时态：记叙文所需要的时态要根据需要决定，一般使用动词的过去时态；记叙文如用对话时，必须注意使用正确的时态及标点符号，还要注意使用适当的连接词，如when, next, afterwards, meanwhile, finally等，用来表示事件之间的时间关系。 注意 （1）动作、语言、心理描写是记叙文写作中最常用的手法，写作时应针对不同主题选择最合适的手法。 （2）故事的发生总是循序渐进的，但在记叙文写作中需做到详略得当，选择与主题契合度高的内容是重中之重。 （3）记叙的最终目的是为了表达作者的看法、观点，“夹叙夹议”往往是明智的做法。 【经典例题】 （2018年高考英语上海卷）假设你是明启中学高三学生卢平，你校英文报向全体高三学生征文，题目为“My teachers”，你有意投稿，撰写一篇文章，内容包括： 1. 对遇到过的老师进行分类 2. 具体描述每一类老师的特征 【审题构思】 本文是一篇以人为主的记叙文，在开始写作前，同学们一定要认真读题，析出题目中的关键词，再围绕这些关键词开展写作。本题有以下关键词： 1．卢平、英文报、向高三学生征文、题目My teachers 2. 分类 3. 具体描述特征 优秀范文 请仔细阅读以下范文，并对其进行赏析和评价。 My teachers On the path of pursuing knowledge, numerous teachers we have encountered may have a lifelong impact on us, and even contribute to shaping who we are. Looking back on my school life, my teachers can be generally classified into three types: dedicated, approachable, and irresponsible. Dedicated teachers are most popular among students not only because of their outstanding professional knowledge but also because of their devotion to the career of teaching. You can expect more than class time of them. They may have a face-to-face communication with you after class to enlighten you with a tricky math problem. They may sacrifice their family time to keep you company so that you can smooth your emotional problem caused by your own family. Needless to say, most teachers fall into this category. The second type of teacher may seem less qualified in terms of their teaching skills, but they can also easily win students’ hearts because they can be entrusted with our deepest secrets. Childhood and adolesence are awkward periods when we struggle to explore our own way in the world. Our peers may be just as inexperienced as us while our parents seemingly live on another planet. So a friendly adult like approachable teachers can be a life saver. We tend to be careful when labeling a teacher irresponsible, but they do exist. Some of them may have temper issue, while others may disregard their own job. One of my teachers fit the description, who was directly linked to my poor academic performance during his stint. In the future, as my learning continues, I will have opportunities to meet more teachers. Whereas, never will I forget the assistance from my previous teachers or their passion for knowledge. 我觉得这篇文章有以下优点： _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 我觉得这篇文章有以下不足： _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 值得我学习的好词好句有： _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 【知识梳理】记叙文写人 (1) 记叙文写人方法 ① 首段： 1.简短介绍这个人（名字、长相、性格，身份等等） 2.陈述与你的关系（家人、朋友、邻居、亲戚、名人、书中角） 3.简述写这个人的理由 ② 主体： 1.对写这个人的理由展开详写； 2.分别举例说明原因。 ③ 尾段： 1.再次简明突出这个人的特点； 2.你对这个人的评价或感受； 3.总结这个人对你的启发。 (2) 写人常用套句： 父母 1. He always comforts me when I get into trouble. 2. My mother is a loving mother, a qualified teacher, and a real hero in my heart. 3. The best way to show my love to my parents is to study hard and live up to their hopes. 4. He always gives me guiding hands when I have to make big decision. 5. As the saying goes, where is Mom, where is home, she is the one who gives me the biggest sense of happiness. 老师 1. She gives an excellent performance before the whole class. 2. She corrects the students’ homework carefully and prepare for the next day. 3. She tries to teach students to develop good study habits. 4. He sets us a good example. 5. All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. 6. He is always ready to help others. 7. She always gives me a smile and encourages me, which helps me a lot in my study. She is the person I will never forget. 8. How lucky I am to be a student of Miss Wang! 朋友 1. I am so proud that I have such a good friend, who often helps me to bring out the best in me. 2. A good friend is like a mirror. 3. I think friends are like books, you don’t need lots of them as long as they are good. 4. Once I did not feel well, and John even carried two heavy schoolbags all the way home. 5. I don’t really care if my friends are the same as me or different. 6. My favorite saying is, “A true friend reaches for your hand and touches your heart.” 7. I know she cares about me because she’s always there to listen. 8. She dreams of being a writer so she is interested in reading and writing. 外貌描述 1. He was born a hooked nose. 2. She eats too much these days, so her face is getting round. 3. He had the most beautiful blue eyes I had never seen. 4. She has a double chin. 5. When he laughs, we see his even teeth. 6. She is charming when she smiles. 7. He has two wrinkled hands. 8. She is a beauty of our class because of her slim figure and big eyes. 其他 1. He has a great sense of humor. 2. The two things that change your life are the people you meet and the books you read. 3.…… is the most beautiful/ smart/intelligent/pretty/warm-hearted/hard-working /unforgettable/open-minded girl that I have ever seen/had/met. 4. It was …… who gave me a hand in time. 5. I’ll never forget the moment when she helps me. 6. I was deeply moved/struck/shocked by him. 7. There is no denying that ……is the most charming actress I have ever seen. 8. The reason why I can’t forget her is that she is so kind and helpful. 9. That is the reason why I want to be a person like him. 第一部分：介绍写作对象 1）经典句型翻译： 1．她12岁。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 2．她细高条，长着大眼睛，卷头发。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 3．她善良，乐于助人，总是愿意帮助别人解决困难。 _____________________________________________________________________ 4．业余时间她喜欢听音乐和读小说。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 5．她与任何人都能相处的很好，无论到哪都很受欢迎。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 2）读下列描写人物外貌和性格特征的常用词语，并进行补充： good-looking----- 描写人物的英语作文hard-working----- bad-tempered----- warm-hearted----- absent-minded---- dependent--------- clever-------------- humorous--------- attractive--------- talkative---------- naughty----------- confident---------- imaginative-------- brave--------------- determined------- strict-------------- energetic---------- educated---------- 第二部分：详细说明写该对象的理由 1）对以下句子进行扩写： 1.Wentao is funny and forgiving. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 2.As a monitor, Wentao is friendly to every classmate. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 3.He is also a reliable person. _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 第三部分：对这个人的评价或感受 翻译练习： 1．他不仅是我们的老师也是我们的朋友， 我们尊重他爱戴他。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 2.他是我们学习的榜样。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 3．他这样的朋友我感到很骄傲。 4．这就是我的父亲：勤劳、善良。我爱我的父亲。 _______________________________________________________________________________ 请写一篇记叙文，讲述一个让你印象深刻的人。词数控制在150~200。内容包括: 1. 简单描述并介绍这个人 2. 印象深刻的原因 3. 这个人对你的启发 ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 1）翻译练习： 1．刘铭，1968年出生在福建省北部的一个山城。毕业于北京大学物理系。在大学期间，他各科成绩优秀，尤其是计算机和英语。他写的论文曾在全国获奖。业余时间他喜欢踢足球。 _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 2．汤姆出生在纽约。他家人口很多。他每天乘校车去上学。放学后他喜欢打篮球。他希望将 来能到中国访问。 _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 3．林老师是我的化学老师。他五十多岁了。他在课上总是鼓励我们提问题。他的课是如此 生动，以至我们都爱学化学。虽然他对我们要求很严格，但我们都很喜欢他。 _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 4．李立被认为是我们班最好的学生之一。她总是乐于帮助别人。她不但学习好，小提琴拉得 也很好。她的两篇作文已经在报纸上发表。她为我们树立了学习的好榜样。 _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________ 5．Rose 是一位年轻的科学家，她每天工作繁忙，但卓有成效。下面记录的是她昨天一天的 主要工作，请以 A Busy Day 为题，以短文的形式描述她的生活。
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2）重写作文： 对课堂作文“让我印象最深刻的人”进行修改，试图多用本节课新学的内容使其改进。 （注意：句型要丰富，长短句相结合，多用修饰词，选用自己有把握的词，尽量避免用词不到位的情况） ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________ ________180 | ||||||||||||||
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