Unit 1 What’s the matter?
单元话题满分范文必背
1.你看过类似的老人跌倒无人理会的新闻吗?你又听说过最美女教师救她的学生的故事吗?对这两种社会现象,你有什么看法呢?请你以“Would you like to help others?”为题写一篇短文。
流光字签名档内容包括:1. 你对上面其中一件事的看法。
2. 如果你遇到了这样的事情会怎样做。
3. 讲述你的一次类似经历。
最温暖的早安心语一瞬间作文要求:1. 词数80个左右。不得照抄原文;不得出现学校的真实名称和学生的真实姓名。
2. 条理清晰,语句连贯。
Would you like to help others?
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【答案】Would you like to help others?
After hearing these events,I was deeply shocked.Why didn’t they help the old man? The things they did were so terrible! We need to help each other,don’t we? I think,if I were one of the passers-by,I would call the police and try my best to help the old man.Last year,on my way to school,I saw a car accident happen.I stopped,called the police and asked other people to help the woman who was injured.At last,she was saved.
If we help each other every day,our world will be warmer and more beautiful.
【解析】
【详解】
这篇作文要求我们Would you like to help others?为题,写一篇作文,选择题目中的一件事,表述自己的看法,并假设自己遇到类似的事情该怎样做,并讲述自己类似的一次经历。
题目中给列出了大概的写作提纲,而具体的内容和细节都需要学生们自己发挥想象力进行补充,这是写作中的一个难点。学生们可以从自己的现实生活出发,搜索相关的素材,然后用正确的英语表达出来。审题可知,这篇短文应主要使用一般现在时态,根据表达需要使用适当的人称,注意谓语动词的正确形式。写作时应注意英语表达习惯和汉语是不同的,不能按照汉语思维逐词翻译,应从句子的整体结构出发,写完整的句子。如可以使用较常见的主谓宾或主系表结构,这种句子结构简单,易于掌握,不易出错。为提升文章档次,可以穿插使用并列句或复合句,如and, but连接的并列句、宾语从句、状语从句等。同时注意语句之间使用恰当的连接成分,使文意连贯。
【点睛】
这是一篇优秀的作文,短文作者根据题目要求,以Would you like to help others?为题,介绍了自己对老人跌倒无人理会这样的事件的看法,假设自己遇到了这样的事情会怎么做,并讲述了自己的一次类似的经历。短文内容完整,包含了题目中要求的所有内容,且对细节进行了想象的描述,使文章内容更加充实、丰富。叙述清晰,有层次。其次短文中使用了正确的人称和时态,短文以第一人称、一般现在时和一般过去时为主来叙述,注意了谓
语动词正确形式的变化,语法规范,用词准确,句式结构完整,表达符合英语的习惯。句式以简单句结构为主,也穿插使用了并列句和宾语从句、状语从句等复合句。表达流畅,文意连贯。短文中较好的句型有After hearing these events, I was deeply shocked.、I think, if I were one of the passers-by, I would call the police and try my best to help the old man、I stopped, called the police and asked other people to help the woman who was injured、If we help each other every day, our world will be warmer and more beautiful等等。
2.Mike昨晚头疼,没睡好觉。今天早上去了医院,医生量过他的体温后发现他并没有发烧,只是有点儿感冒。医生给他开了一些药,让他每天吃两次,多喝热水,好好休息。最后,医生建议他每天锻炼身体。
请你根据以上信息及下面提示,写一篇不少于80词的短文。
提示:1. What is the matter with Mike?
2. How many times does Mike should take the medicine?
3. What did the doctor advise him to do?
要求:
1. 包含所有提示,可适当发挥;
2. 开头已给出,不计入总词数。
芮成钢虚实之间Mike didn’t sleep well last night _______________________________________________________
【答案】Mike didn’t sleep well last night because he had a headache. His father took him to the hospital this morning. After taking his temperature, the doctor told him that there was nothing serious. He didn’t have a fever, but had a little cold. Then the doctor gave him some medicine and asked him to take it twice a day. The doctor also told him that he should drink more hot water and have a good rest.
At last, the doctor advised him to do more exercise every day because exercising will help him stay healthy. I hope he will be better soon.
【解析】
【详解】
这是一篇材料作文。根据所给信息和提示,写一篇不少于80词的短文。本文人称主要第三人称,时态主要是一般过去时。仔细阅读提示和要点、要求。这些要点构成写作的基本框架。动笔前要认真阅读材料,不要遗漏要点,并适当发挥。根据提示要点,列出本文的写作提纲,提纲包括所有提示要点。写完以后,注意再读一遍,看看有无拼写、语法错误(时态、主谓一致等)。本文提纲:
迈克昨晚睡得不好,因为他头痛。他父亲今天早上把他送到医院。医生给他量了体温,告诉他没有什么严重的。他没有发烧,但有点感冒。然后医生给他开了些药,让他每天吃两次。医生还告诉他应该多喝水,好好休息。
最后,医生建议他每天多运动,因为运动有助于他保持健康。我希望他很快会好起来。
【点睛】
这篇文章语言规范,叙事清楚,时态运用正确,叙述清楚条里,语句通顺,意思连贯,是一篇不错的文章。学以致用,运用了重要句型和短语有:After taking his temperature, the doctor told him that there was nothing serious./ Then the doctor gave him some medicine and asked him to take it twice a day./ At last, the doctor advised him to do more exercise every day because exercising will help him stay healthy.等。(1)学习中注意总结,牢记一些固定句式及短语,写作时就可以适当引用,使文章的表达更有逻辑性,更富有条理。(2)列好提纲和要点及需要的重要短语或句型。(3)切忌堆砌词语、句子,注意运用适当的连词使句子流畅、连贯。注意表达的顺序。 (4)注意书写的规范:大小写、标点符号等的正确运用。(5)注意检查:单词拼写、语法、动词时态、语序、主谓一致等。
洪灾3.Mike昨晚头疼,没睡好觉。今天早上去了医院,医生量过他的体温后发现他并没有发烧,只是有点儿感冒。医生给他开了一些药,让他每天吃两次,多喝热水,好好休息。最后,医生建议他每天锻炼身体。
请你根据以上信息及下面提示,写一篇不少于80词的短文。
提示:1. What is the matter with Mike?
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